Thanks @spacekookie for sharing this feedback
I agree with most of what that person said, I do have a few remarks:
This can actually be a good occasion to make cross references throughout our both texts as I develop more this aspect in the text I wrote, so maybe ou could reference it.
Maybe the paragraph I am writing about the different relations to locality can help draw the beginning of a modality. Also the supporting resistances text from @how can be used here: Pænser Ensemble / Daring Together - #3 by how